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My first fan fiction


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tahnee503

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My first fan fiction
« on: October 25, 2008, 06:11:00 PM »
Hey guys not that this is self advertising or anything but I would love to have your advise on this
http://tahnee503.deviantart.com/art/My-first-fanfiction-Kataang-101748441
its my first fan fiction ever and I wanted to know if I should write a story with my skills or if I'm a bad writer lol

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Re: My first fan fiction
« Reply #1 on: October 25, 2008, 06:32:42 PM »
I like it. :D One tip though, don't use so many of the same words in one sentence. And also, don't use slang, like "crap", because I don't think those words exist in the "Avatar" universe. ;) Good job!

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« Reply #2 on: October 25, 2008, 06:40:11 PM »
I like it. :D One tip though, don't use so many of the same words in one sentence. And also, don't use slang, like "crap", because I don't think those words exist in the "Avatar" universe. ;) Good job!

Thanks and about the slang lol I just thought they don't exist in the universe but that doesn't mean the characters can't think those words ;)